Wednesday, September 12, 2007

Practice News Story 2: Fire

Yesterday afternoon between 2 and 3 p.m., a fire broke out in a building on Washington Boulevard and 21st Street in Ogden. The building, owned by local businesswoman Rachael Calhoun, housed a local restaurant called Pedro’s Mexican Restaurant. The owner, Pedro Sanchez, and his brother and his two nieces lived upstairs above the restaurant. There were no deaths involved and only minor burn and smoke ventilation injuries.

Ogden City Department Fire Chief Greg Chamberlain was on the scene and declared the building a “total loss.” The fire began in the downstairs kitchen of the restaurant when some grease got caught on fire. The owner wasn’t able to put out the fire with a fire extinguisher and the fire spread. He only suffered minor burns on his arms. The only customer in the restaurant called in the fire. Fire Marshal said they were “Just glad we got everybody out” and declared his teams fire fighting skills a “Success.” “That’s how we like to do things.”

At the time of the fire in the apartment above the restaurant, were Pedro’s brother Miguel Sanchez and his 2 and 4-year-old daughters. He could here his brother yelling “Fire, fire!” downstairs so he immediately grabbed his daughters and vacated the building. The owner remarked that there were “People upstairs that needed my help, but I couldn’t get to them.”

The owner of the building thinks that the building should be rebuilt soon and Pedro’s will be back for more all his various fans. She said that “I’m glad nobody got hurt.”

2 comments:

Camille said...

Seems to be a bit of repition with words. I kind of got confused with in the first paragraph with who was the owner of the building. You used owner with Rachel and Pedro. Also some confusion near the end when you said Pedro Sanchez and his brother Miguel and his two kids...it kind of sounded like the kids could have been Pedro's. You might have wanted to state that you used a translater or something to the extent when you used Miguel's quote because he couldn't speak English. Nice job and making everything flow nicely and placing direct quotes.

Kendra Askeroth said...

Hey Corey , good story!
I think you could cut out some of your words and cut to the chase faster. Get the main most important fatcs and out them first.